Introducing the villain

by Peircen Williams
(Auburndale, FL, USA)

Hey I've been trying to figure this out. I am 16 and completely new to writing but I have an outstanding imagination that I feel is going to waste so i decided to write a fantasy novel series. In my series the main character is a 15 year old boy who has just recently discovered that he is the general of one of six powerful armies in a parallel world. Each army can control one of six elements (fire,water,air,earth,light,darkness) and he has the army of fire. He is supposed to go and seek out these six ancient weapons that if they fell into the wrong hands it could mean the end of both worlds. This will go on for about 7-8 books the main problem i have is adding in the villain who he meets in the first book. The villain is an ancient spirit who once controlled the army of darkness (the evil army). He is supposed to take over someone's body and use it as a vessel and tries to stop the hero. I am not sure when to add him in exactly i want to add him in at the end when he obtains the first weapon but I'm worried that that will seem bad or not since he only shows up at the end and disappears just as quick. When do you think it would be a good idea to add him in?


Answer: It depends whether your villain is also your impact character.

In addition to the overall
story problem (e.g. finding one of the weapons), your main character in each book should face an inner conflict. He is not at peace about something. He is pressured to change, to become something different, to adopt a new approach to dealing with problems etc. This conflict builds towards his personal crisis, where he must decide whether or not to change.

The choice he makes will determine if he can achieve the story goal. There's no knowing what the right choice is ahead of time. That's the fun part.

In order to create that inner conflict, you need to put an impact character into the story. This is someone who has a completely different approach than the main character. Seeing this person in action causes the main character to wonder if his usual approach is the right one, or if he should change and follow the impact character's example.

In some stories, the villain is also the impact character. In this case, you need to have the villain present throughout the story, so he can pressure the main character to change. (This is most common in stories where the main character stays steadfast, because to change would mean becoming like the villain.)

In other stories, the impact character is someone else in the main character's life - a friend, a mentor, a love interest, etc. (This is more common in stories where the main character changes.) Again, this character should be present throughout the story, so he/she can cause the main character to doubt himself.

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Mar 22, 2015
Story help
by: Anonymous

So, I'm also writing a fantasy novel series. And I need help in introducing the main villain. The main villain is the God of that world or, "creator" so to speak. He has also secretly been one of the main characters In the book the whole time and I'm having trouble thinking of a clever way for him to reveal himself. Any help please?

Apr 01, 2016
I cant finish anything!!!!!!
by: 3000

As I speak, i have over a dozen different novels, all halfway. Some have been that way for over two years. I get an idea, and i start writing like am never going to stop. Next thing, its like "where did all that come from in the first place?" I stare at paper for hours and then fall asleep. and then it happens the next day. And the next. One year later, that manuscript joins the pile. I NEED HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!

Apr 02, 2016
to 3000
by: Glen

I have one suggestion: outline.

Most of the time when stories run out of steam it's because we lose the emotional thread or the narrative drive. The complexity in the middle causes us to lose sight of the path between the story's beginning and the crisis.

Check out the articles on this sight related to story models, synopses, and outlines. They will help you find a structure for your story that helps you keep your finger on the pulse of the story so it becomes easier to stay on track and finish a work.

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