Afraid of Second Act Sag

by Scott
(San Francisco, CA)

Question: First of all, great to have found your site. Very well thought out and detail oriented.


Am well into my novella, which deals with a very hot-button moral/ethical/political subject. The first Act went very well. And now, the dreaded Second Act. I very much like the way I have the work outlined but have run into here on this site, as well as in many other books, on many other sites, the warning not to spend too much time in flashback-mode, which is the majority of the structure of my Second Act. While the novella's POV is mostly from the protagonist, in the second act it changes some - to the (medical) morphine dreams of one of the four main characters. This character is in and out of consciousness - as her morphine is increased, then slowly decreased and ultimately withdrawn. She is literally flashing back through her life, much of which deals with two of the other main characters in the book (her two sons). Long segments of exposition/backstory will fill this Second Act, though they are broken-up occasionally by a 'return' to current happenings around her as she lay in bed.

Structurally, I want my plan to work, and am wondering if you have any tips that may make my construction for the Second Act more agreeable.

Answer: I have two issues for you to consider.

1. How do the flashbacks contribute to the story?

If you think about act two as the Complication phase, this is the act in which the protagonist has embarked on the effort to achieve the story goal, but is running into all the problems, obstacles, adversaries, etc. that naturally appear at the outset of a journey. It's not enough to present exposition and backstory. The plot needs to thicken in this act. The relationships and their challenges need to deepen. The issues need to become more obvious. The tension needs to build. The stakes need to become higher.

Try to keep sections of exposition/backstory short and/or interspersed with plot events.

2. To make longer flashbacks work, consider giving this character's backstory a dramatic structure with its own goal, signposts, drivers, conflict, growing tension, crisis, and resolution. This applies regardless if the flashbacks are the actual story of the character's life or a delusion created by the morphine (i.e. a struggle for reality/sanity). Even if you tell the events of the flashback in a non-chronological order, giving them a chronological dramatic arc will keep your reader more interested.

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Apr 28, 2015
Thank you
by: Scott

Thank you for posting my question and for your analysis of possible pitfalls and, ways out of it. I'm thinking of T.S. Eliot now who said - "Before one breaks the rules, it's good to know them." And so I do . . .

There are intimations of plot-point/theme in Act 1, a fairly detailed introduction to the protagonist, an above-average intro to a character that you refer to as an "impact character", and to the antagonist. In short, all major players come to light here.

There is very much a ticking-clock at work. The woman on morphine is dying, but before she does she has a decision to make, and needs to be "clear"/morphine-free to do that. Her decision must be made when her mind is clear, and before the pain (again) returns and becomes unbearable (when the clock strikes).

The exposition/back story in Act 2 is very much a story in its own right, with all the affiliated peaks and valleys. This back story addresses not so much the "what" of the dilemma, but the "how" or it and the "why."

I had already planned to make each morphine-dream scene in Act 2 progressively shorter, as the sick woman comes out of her morphine haze and nearer and nearer to consciousness . . . but I will now make them shorter still. The rest of Act 2 - the other half of the tapestry, the Now part - is the fleshing-out of the numerous moral dilemmas that each of the characters face as the clocks ticks.

I am encouraged now more than ever that there is way out of this that allows me to continue with my original construction. Thank you for your part in this . . . and Mr. Eliot, thank you . . . I'm off to see now not when this might break, but how far it might bend.

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