voices

by erika
(rigby,id,usa)

Sorry, I know I already sent a question like this one not to long ago, but I have to make sure.


So my question is: I don't want my villain to shriek most of the time - only when she is really mad. I have some places in my book where she is thoughtful, ice cold and even "hot as fire." At this point in my book she is having a conversation with one of her knights (who is trying to capture the princess but failed) in this conversation I want her voice not to shriek but to be thoughtful, cold, and "hot as fire." Each line she has in this conversation will be one of the three, but I don't want to say "her voice was thoughtful" or "ice cold was her voice now." I wouldn't mind if it, but saying "was" every time she speaks with the knight seems repetitive how should I fix this to make the reader know that she isn't always a shriek without having to say "was" all the time?

Answer: Try showing her attitude through her actions as well as her tone of voice. What does she do with her eyes, her hands, various objects? What is the expression on her face? How does she hold her body? These will all be different depending on her emotion. Often, you only need one telling detail to make everything clear.

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Aug 23, 2012
thank you
by: Anonymous

thanks so much it should help alot :D

Aug 23, 2012
thank you
by: Anonymous

thanks so much it should help alot :D

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