plotline: good or bad?

by sam
(pa)

Question: ok so my plot involves two teenage boys named Lyle and Max, who are filled with angst. They're in love with each other and have been in a relationship for three years. It's their graduation day and Max decides to shoot up the school and was inspired by a "hit list" that he and Lyle created to rant about everybody. Max kills himself once he realizes that Lyle was injured by trying to stop the shooting. Now, Lyle has to go to college and experience a whole new level of hatred than he ever did before from his family and other students about what they think he did. He meets a man who loves him, but has secretly done something bad. How will Lyle deal with all of this and STILL be in love with Max l at the same time, no matter what?


Answer: I think you have two separate stories here.

The first is a high-school tragedy that culminates in the shooting. I'm not entirely sure you can leave Lyle forever in love with Max, because he's going to have to acknowledge that Max chose the wrong way to deal with his problems. Somehow, Lyle has to reconcile his feelings for Max with the reality of Max's actions, and that may mean that Lyle has to recognize the flaws within himself. Failing to do that would make Lyle a psychopath, and I don't think that's your aim.

The second story is the college romance/suspense in which Lyle falls in love perhaps with the wrong sort of person (again).

Personally, I think the first story has more potential, but you will have to spend some time developing it and thinking about what sort of message you want to deliver.

Best of luck.

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Dec 10, 2015
Psychotic Break
by: Anonymous

He can have a psychotic break. While the man can really love him and have a secret, lyle can have a secret of his own too. He can become a manwhore because he is struggling to keep the love alive for max. After each encounter, he can accused the person he just had liaison with of trying to get him to leave max or come between max. Then he would kill him but when he is with the new man, he is as sane and undetectable. then later there will be a breaking point where both secrets come out of the bag and let the reader decide whose secret was worse.

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